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I wanted to update the original file, but I guess DA won't let you change videos. : Hrm... Anyway! I've tweaked a few shots and I think the story makes more sense and has a better ending now.

Thank you, everyone, for the previous feedback! It was really helpful. I'm definitely still open to crits, but I consider this mostly finished, even with the inconsistent visual "styles". In other words, I appreciate feedback on the story, pacing, and composition, but I don't plan on shading the second part, as I don't think doing so contributes to the actual story.

Thanks. :)

First draft: [link]
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Tea-Bricks Featured By Owner Aug 2, 2014  Hobbyist Digital Artist
That was awesome :3
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Krysiis Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
That was the best
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Wolgron Featured By Owner Apr 24, 2014
Lmao, this was adorable.
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I-wish-I-was-a-seiyu Featured By Owner Feb 6, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
It's cute! If you ever need voices, I'd be happy to help!
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Airon35TX Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very interesting!
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TheSpaceJumper Featured By Owner Aug 9, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
AWESOME!
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starling16 Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Amusing, and with a different kind of ending :) Also the style goes well. After my brain got over the jump of shaded to not, it didn't mind lol.
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chunjihuli Featured By Owner Jun 25, 2013  Hobbyist
how cool c:
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greymuzzles Featured By Owner Jun 13, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Just have to say that I love the idea and execution of this. In fact, my only real 'criticism' would be the fact that it isn't a full animation, and that comes only from a desire to see how good it would be
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VickeyTheWolf Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
very very very EPIC :iconepicclapplz:
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MoonLightRose17 Featured By Owner May 31, 2013  Student Filmographer
that was such a cute story :heart: I love how the fox was so picky about what eggs to eat XD and the chicken was so nice to give him the eggs at the end, and like she said it's not like chicks were going to come out of those eggs anyway.
very nice! :clap:
if you don't mind me asking: will you animate this? 'cause it's just such a nice little story >w<
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Tsimmu Featured By Owner May 25, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank was awesome! And adorable.
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Zimuus Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Very nice!
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NaturgeistFotos Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
very cute =^__^= :heart:
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yue-luv-art Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
aww i like how the fox looks like
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NordLyset Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Student General Artist
Great!
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Sprouteeh Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Student Filmographer
That looks awesome so far!
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XxvThunderwolfvxX Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
aww its so sweet!! :)
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Serifer Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Ahh this is Awesome!! :D
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KyashaKitsune Featured By Owner May 22, 2013   General Artist
:giggle: oh that's cute :XD:
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Gryffgirl Featured By Owner May 22, 2013
Great work--I love the fox! I especially love his expressions of disgust when he reads the signs! :XD:
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realflow001 Featured By Owner May 22, 2013
Wait what..... I'm confused with the end of the movie a little bit.... O.o......
a bit cute though
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Tatchit Featured By Owner May 22, 2013
this is really neat! I own chickens myself and I remember seeing your draft a while back and thought it was really cute. Glad to see you've gone a little further. c:
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KurisuUzune Featured By Owner May 22, 2013
his face at 1:25 was funny and cute, nice job :D
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Saceronsage Featured By Owner May 22, 2013   General Artist
This is too cool! I'm a chicken nerd so I started grinning the moment I saw all the homogenized and antibiotics signs.
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KlakKlak Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Student General Artist
Haha! It was tricky coming up with that list of words... I think they're mostly nonsense when applied to eggs. But my mom recently began working at a farm, and we were surprised to hear people actually asking for "pasteurized eggs". But... it turns out they meant "pasture-raised".
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Saceronsage Featured By Owner May 26, 2013   General Artist
Lol, regardless, I think this is an excellent twist on the old 'fox ransacks a chicken house'. I have to say my favorite part was the "It's not like they're fertilized." Not many people know you don't need a rooster to get eggs!
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PygmyArmadilloo Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist Artist
Pretty awesome animation! What did you use to make this though?
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KlakKlak Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Student General Artist
All done in Photoshop CS6. :)
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Jerepasaurus Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I saw the changes! ♥♥♥ The basket was a perfect touch. And that sign addition was spot-on. That ending really fit that understanding between the two. I even got a little teary and "AWWWW" when the fox got to leave with a gifted meal. C':

Really wonderful. :hug: I'm glad to see things worked so well for you!
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KlakKlak Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Student General Artist
Hey, thank you for your advice before. :) You know... I'm kind of wondering about leaving in the hug. I like it visually, but it might be too much without the 'family' context of before. I'm really not sure.
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Jerepasaurus Featured By Owner May 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
No problem at all! I'm glad that my input was actually of use to you! ♥♥♥
I had to think about the family context you mention here; I'm not sure if I'm missing something now. XD From what I'm imagining you mean though, is that a hug from a random hen and random fox seems perhaps 'overly' friendly for two strangers. I could see a simple shoulder hug or warm rub/pat on the back working well though, because I myself have struck up suddenly warm and friendly conversations with older women, and they might find something I say or do endearing and they'll pat my hand or upper arm in a grandmotherly way. I could also see the hen alternatively making a comment after that of the instinct mention, saying something along the lines of, "It's hard to find a decent meal these days" being the hint of the modifications to their diets and the signs nearby.

Sorry for the late reply, btw. x)
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Kaleoscope Featured By Owner May 22, 2013  Student Traditional Artist
Aha I love this!
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Napoisk Featured By Owner May 22, 2013
So, the hen just gives him the eggs because they are not fertilized? Or am I missing something? :XD:

I'm sure it's really obvious too!
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